托福獨立寫作向來是各位應考生的噩夢 

如何在有限時間內搶下高分,實在需要點技巧和方法

今天就讓小編分享高分寫作的小撇步給大家吧~

 

(如果對托福寫作還不清楚地可以看→托福整合與獨立寫作重點整理)

 


 

首先,英文作文的標準格式,第一步就是要 “選邊站”

而整篇英文作文的標準結構應該為:

 

第一段:選擇 “論點” (選邊站)

第二段:說明選擇這個論點的第一個原因,並舉例。

第三段:說明選擇這個論點的第二個原因,並舉例。

第四段:說明不要選擇另一個論點的原因,並舉例。

第五段:結論 (呼應自己所選擇的論點)。

 

(前情提要→托福獨立寫作小技巧)

 

這樣描述或許有點空泛,現在就讓小編來舉個例子吧:

 

題目: Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?It is more important to keep your old friends than it is to make new friends.Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.

 

範文第一段: In a life time, we will meet many people, we get on well with some of them and they become our friends. As we grow up, we meet new people and make new friends. Since old friends and new friends do not bring us the same things, we cannot compare them.

 

很明顯的,這位同學一開始就犯了沒有 “選邊站” 的錯誤,沒有確實說出到底是維持舊朋友還是結交新朋友比較重要,在此,我們就以 “結交新朋友比維持舊朋友重要” 這個論點,來完成這篇作文。

 

<第一段的修正>

 

It is a highly debated issue whether it is more important to keep your old friends than it is to make new friends, and this topic can be approached from several angles due to its complexity. Deeply deliberating over the issue, I believe that it is more important to make new friends than it is to keep old friends, and the following discussion reveals my stand and reasoning.

 

毫不拖泥帶水,第一段馬上說出自己的論點,並在接下來的段落中做說明舉例

 

 

範文第二、三、四段: Old friends are the ones we can count on. We trust them and they know us well. When I feel sad or when I need to talk to someone about a serious problem, I go to see my old friends because they are reliable and I know that they will understand me more than anyone else. My old friends are very important to me and I agree with the fact that it is important to make efforts to keep old friends.

 

For example, when I left my country and moved in France for studying at the age of 15, I tried to keep in contact with all my Taiwanese friends in order to feel less far from home and to keep in mind where I am from, especially in some moments of loneliness.

 

But it is also very important to make new friends. That is way to learn, to change, and they bring us different things. Making new friends makes us more open-minded, and in this way, we can discover new personalities. For instance, I met a German girl on holiday two years ago and we got on very well, so we kept in touch and I went to visit her in Germany twice. She belongs to this kind of people who you know that they will be important in your life, and who you know you can have a long and strong friendship with.

 

因為我們這篇文章是以 “結交新朋友比較維持舊朋友重要” 為主旨,所以原文當中的第二段以及第三段關於維持舊朋友的敘述我們就加以但保留第四段的對於結交新朋友的說明,然後重新整理。

 

<第二段的修正>

 

To begin with, making new friend is a way to learn, to change and to bring us different things. That is to say, making new friend makes us more open-minded, and in this way we can discover new personalities. For example, I met a German girl on holiday two years ago and we got on very well, so we kept in touch and I went to visit her in Germany twice. She belongs to this kind of people who you know that they will be important in your life, and who you know you can have a long and strong friendship with.


<第三段的修正>

 

Secondly, making new friend is a lot more entertaining than keeping in touch with the old ones. To further elaborate, there are new topics to talk about, new activities to do together,and new personality traits to discover. For instance, you may also get to meet the persons who are close your new friend. And so maybe you will even receive a whole group of new friends by making only one new friend.

 

 

在二三段敘述完自己選擇 “結交新朋友比較重要” 這個論點之後,為了讓自己的文章感覺更加中立,沒有偏頗,第四段我們要反向陳述為什麼我們沒有選擇維持舊朋友比較重要的原因。

 

<第四段的修正>

 

By contrast, there is a popular opinion that keeping old friends is more important than making new friends. Nevertheless, this belief fails to consider the fact that we are bound to lose some of our old friends usually. For example, I had a very good friend a few years ago, but we do not see each other anymore since I moved in another town. I guess that we also grew up and took a different way and there is no use to keep old friends when you realize that you have nothing left in common.

 

最後,就讓我們把範文中弱弱的結論也來修正一下吧

 

範文第五段: As a conclusion, I would say that everybody need to have at least a few real and strong friendship.

 

<第五段的修正>

 

To sum up, with the reasons that I mentioned above, firstly, making new friend is a way to learn, to change and to bring us different things, and secondly, making new friend is a lot more entertaining than keeping in touch with the old ones. I think that it is more important to make new friends than it is to keep the old friends.

 

 

看完修正過的文章後,大家有沒有覺得比原本的範文

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